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I'm done today, my mind's in pain
I'm still not free, I can't be me
I am questioned by voices lying deep inside my inner cerebellum
I am being hit-and-ran upon, I am being spit upon, like an old vellum
I can't close an eye, empty my mind, free my inner cerebral cortex
I feel doomed, insane, raped, madness has reached its infernal climax!
I am questioned by many, I answer to no one
It is my life I live that swirls like a fan.
Like a clock, tick tock tick tock, too late!
The Puppeteer's questioning my fate…
I am being questioned and I don't enjoy it!
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Molybdenum-Blues Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice!
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Brici5 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hey thanks!
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Gwenvar Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012   General Artist
The ending happened to be very good, gz!
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Brici5 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much
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Gwenvar Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012   General Artist
You're welcome!
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dancingpickles22 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012   Writer
I love how you worded this :)
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Brici5 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks!
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dancingpickles22 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012   Writer
yw :)
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cardinal-hearts Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this poem however I think your line spacing needs more work (or maybe that's just me). Otherwise I love the words you used!
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Brici5 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for your advice :) I really appreciate and I will surely keep that in mind!
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